A Substitute Passion

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Ron “Orlando Furioso” (19 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

I came back for more as I enjoyed A Martial Artist Meets his Match so much. I read The whimpering Beach, and A substitute Passion.

I was quite taken with Beach but phps was indifferent to the gay angle. But I loved Substitute passion which I though was archly funny with serious underlying wisdom to it.

You have definitely got the hang of the short story form. I thought the opening graphs of both were very strong, with the opening of Beach being the stronger of the two. Beach was quite moody and, I suppose, captures the unspoken linkages that go on when two people who are to be lovers start to notice each other in a subconscious way before it becomde conscious. But it was Substitute Passion that really tickled me. And I think the end was also very strong. There was a lot packed into the story, both action and emotional travel. In fact the story cleverly spans years in the way it captures the build up of tension. There is a lot to be learnt from this story.

One great thing about reading shorts is that if one does not work you have not wasted too much time. And fromt he writers point of view you rapidly have another chance to score a bullseye. This is exactly what happend with me in reading both these stories. I am happy. I will come back for more.

“Shieldmaiden” (5 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Hmm--well. That was weird. I didn't expect Mandy to kill Helen. I thought it'd have a comical ending. Hmm. Still--enjoyed the ride. Maybe too much. I'm not sure I should be wanting to egg on characters in the middle of a cat fight. The story was sure fun. I also read the story with the martial artist (read it first, because I've always had an avid interest in martial arts) and found it very funny. Portrays the unfortunate plight of man to a very real degree. (And that's coming from a woman). As strange as it may seem, I have to agree with the guy--the girl was totally deluded. Totally unreasonable...and weird. ;D Good job on your writing.

NA Randall (5 December 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Fletcher, I read Choosing the Right Drinks a few months back, and really enjoyed and admired your writing style. 'A Substitute Passion' covers similar emotional territory, and is of the same high quality. Your observational touches are a special feature, the way you get into the heads of your characters - who are a little lonely and lost - gives your stories a depth rarely found. When I get a bit of space on my shelf, I'll be happy to give you another spin, and hope to dip back into your collection when I have more time.

“child” (19 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

The author manages to instill completely different voices into the characters of the first two stories I read. Clemency finally finds a true vocation/obsession and lives up to her name after becoming engrossed in the patch-worked story of Joseph's life told while he is dying. This was a poignant story very well told. The second, involving Mandy and Helen's fixations and inadequacies and an act committed in the name of passion, I found not so compelling.

Ren Nowaki (18 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Hi Fletch. Thoughts and nitpicks. Remember: only one person's opinion, disregard if inappropriate or completely off-kilter.

Choosing the Right Drinks. Oh nice ending. Sweet, engaging, rather lovely and uplifting. I wonder if you can do dark and disturbing too. You write exceptionally well, with great subtlety and depth. I'm enjoying this.

A Substitute Passion. Wow this is intense. Lots of issues rising up here and a complete cow of a misunderstanding. Nice work. Ooooh, yes, dark. Very nice. Really enjoyed this. Great layering and build up. Fabulous.

Irresistible Temptation. I did not like this story as much as the previous two; this seems a rather negative allegory of life and seems to involve a kind of self-destructive loop. I'm unsure if the old man met at the beginning is the narrator; if so then he should meet his younger self and pass out of the lane; if not then should there not be many elderly men roaming this lane as others emerge from their garden experiences? Also, the man seems to have learned very little from his sojourn in the garden save that it was a terrible experience. You would expect that if he were serious about warning others from the garden, he'd elaborate a bit more about its dangers. While I realise this isn't supposed to be grounded in reality as we know it, but still, there should be some kind of option - for there is always another option - for these young men to take. Two doors, rather than one, or the choice to run from the lane altogether. The way this is presented is that the gateway is there and people go through it out of that nihilistic instinct to disobey orders (or innate human curiosity). Without something else, there is nothing else, and I can't abide a singular presentation of life in such a way - hence why I do not like this story. It doesn't convince me.

Craig Stemford's imprisonment. Yup, big jump forward here! Interesting neighbours. I wouldn't have expected W11 to be home to porn directors (then again, I'm SE15, home to crack dealers). 'Would you like some tea?' - perfect timing there. I laughed. Interesting end idea. I liked this immensely.

Overall- your way with words is quick and detailed. You have a light touch that descends quite deeply. You mention in your profile that short story writing suits you, and this affinity comes across in the stories themselves. There's a mix of abstract and reality-based stories here, all relating to the human condition in its various forms and interpretations - at least, that's the impression I get from the selection I've read. I'm not sure how well this would do commercially but I suspect this would appeal to a broad range of people. You have nice work here, and I wish you well with it.

Lorri Proctor (30 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I became caught up at once with your style, imagery and the depth of understanding of your characters. The stories are well written, very well written, though at times just a little to verbose which made me skip a few paragraphs at times so I suggest you maybe go through and make the sentences a little shorter here and there and knock out some of the introspection of the characters because we readers can understand a lot without being told in detail. Sometimes it's not even important to know why the characters do what they do. The themes of the first five stories I read seems to be explore the minds and feelings of rather obssessive, way-out people and this is different, interesting, captures one's interest. But after a while, I felt tired of the wierdness and samness in some respects of the obsessions. I mean to read them all and see if you manage to make some quite different.

However, they are in many ways brilliant. Choosing the Right Drinks, and A Substitute Passion are my faves so far. I suggest you try sending a story to the Narrative Magazine autumn competition. Also take a look at Diiarts.com site. They want some short stories sent. Hope all this helps. Basically your work is truly good. Lots of luck Lorri

Cori “corichaffee” (13 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I've read Choosing the Right Drinks, A Substitute Passion, Irresistible Temptation, and Samuel Pam's Salvation... and I'm fascinated... disturbed... and impressed. I love that you have stepped outside of the lines of normalcy on these stories. You have written things that I wouldn't tend to expect, which makes them all the more interesting. I don't tend to read short story books, because I usually find that the stories are lacking- that by the end of each short story, I am left wanting to read more. You have masterfully managed to do the opposite. You write each one in such a talented way that I am left feeling satisfied in the story.

Excellent job and I am happily backing it.

“Diane60” (24 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher, Just read your second story - a substitute passion. Boy oh Boy have you captured the manic insane world of women in one story! Can see Mandy a lot in a younger me and also a bit of Helen too that is what is so special about this story it captures different parts of your life. Well well done. :) Diane

Lynne (19 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I read A Substitute Passion, and My Constant Companion. Wow, so different and so entertaining. They are beautifully written stories which are gripping and thought provoking. A great collection to dip in and out of and I wish you the very best of luck.

Bill Carrigan (18 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Greetings Fletch, I too like short stories and have posted 43 of mine on Authomony.com. I've read several of yours--with much interest and admiration. They're thoughtful, sophisticated, sometimes light, sometimes intense; and you're good at getting to the essence of your characters. I'm always critical of craft, but find no fault with yours, even in your long, flowing sentences, which are clear and economical. Indeed, there's a style to your writing that lifts it to a literary level.

That said, I have two criticisms, which you mustn't take too seriously, as other critics might disagree. First, I think you should break down some of your longer paragraphs, especially those that contain more than one person's point of view. For example, there's an opening scene in Choosing the Right Drinks where a nurse cries in the linen closet, then smilingly confronts her superior, whose mind we then enter. I see that as two paragraphs. Second, you do a lot of "telling" rather than "showing," a distinction emphasized by many critics. Dialogue can make the difference, bringing the reader closer to the action. In A Substitute Passion, the story takes off where Mandy and the fat lady argue. Suddenly you're SHOWING us. Of course, telling has its place, but try to find ways to dramatize your point. Think of a film, where you can't tell the viewer anything (except with corny voice-over); everything must be shown.

Best of luck, Bill

Margaret Anthony (18 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I chose at random and read A Substitute Passion and The Beckoning Precipice. For short stories, they are remarkable complex, well certainly The Precipice is. There is no doubt you are a talented writer with thought-provoking issues expertly interleaved into your stories. You clearly have a keen eye for the foibles of individuals and provide effective visual imagery which brings the story to life extremely well.

If I were to pass any critique at all, perhaps some of the narrative particularly again in The Beckoning Precipice could be slightly less 'long winded' for want of a better word but it is purely my thought and no way detracts from the excellence of your writing. Backed.

Haley Brite (14 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Hey Fletcher. The reason I enjoy short stories is because they give you a lot very quickly. I chose to read A Substitute Passion and have earmarked a few others but I will have to read them later as I lack the time. I picked it because I love my stilettos and I will admit to freaking out a bit when, 20 years ago, Mandy decided to destroy all of hers. I actually gasped and went: "NO!" My husband now thinks I'm playing online poker and losing. (Which I don't because I would be very, very bad at it)

Mandy is a very... Intense character. Until I knew why she was being very, very rude to the red walrus.. Ermm Helen, I simply thought she was a b****. But then you gave us the reason. Paul.

Although Mandy sometimes annoyed me. I wanted her to grow a pair and get over it (or better yet, do something about it) I was surprised when I realized where this would end.

Poor Helen. She's having the worst day. Having not the right word but it's the first one that comes to mind.

I found it funny how she followed Mandy around until, of course, it ended the way it did.

Mandy and Helen feel a little overdone but in a wonderful way. I don't mean to sound like I'm putting you, or them down at all. I liked them in their very unrealistic responses to a mishap on the sidewalk. I've often wondered what it would be like to take my temper out on someone who doesn't deserve it and after reading this, I doubt I ever will.

The only thing I would say needs fixing is the paragraphs. They are very long and Mandy or Helen sometimes talk in the middle of them. I would space them apart better for an easier read.

I like your work and wish you all the best with it. Backed with pleasure.

Duncan Watt (10 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Hi Fletcher ,These stories are witty, dry and totally funny. I love the title and the explanation for its use. In Choosing the Right Drinks I wanted to shake clemency out of her stupor, but at the same time I felt sorry for her.

If I had to make a comment I would suggest a good proof read to remove unwanted words, especially 'had'. Towards the end of A Substitute Passion: 'And Mandy said nothing, for there was nothing more to say; there was nothing left inside her, and the primal force that had made her stop and turn, now lifted her arm, and she watched, coldly, detached, as though watching someone else's distant memory, as her hand pushed the stiletto heel into the side of Helen's neck, pushed it with a force that had seemed to come from the centre of the earth. had seemed unstopable, irresistable, beyond any human intervention, had flown through her arm like a branch of invisible lightning'. I would cut this sentence and break it up for I did not realise until I re read it, there are 92 words in this sentence.

I would re write it: 'And Mandy said nothing, there was nothing more to say, nothing left inside her. The primal force that made her stop and turn now lifted her arm. Coldly and detached, as though watching someone else's distant memory she watched her hand push the stiletto heel into the side of Helen's neck. An unstopable, irresistable force that appeared to come from the centre of the earth, like forked lightning, seemed to power her arm'.

I Apologise for my pickiness. 'Backed'. Regards ... Duncan.

[fk. Hi Duncan. Many thanks for your comment and your backing. This type of thing is very much a question of personal taste. A few writers on this site have commented on my long sentences, whilst many others have praised that particular aspect of my style, saying that they very much like the fluidity of those long passages.
In those particular passages of mine, there is nothing accidental, and I have often carefully edited the passages over a few separate readings, each often a few weeks or months apart. Every aspect of the passage is deliberate. I read back the passage that you’ve highlighted, and I thought it was beautiful; for me, it has a musical quality to it. I read your edited version, and I have to say that if read such prose, I would feel a great aversion to it; your first sentence is not even grammatically correct. And when I read your sentences, there seems to be no “flow” at all; the prose destroys the “atmosphere” of the passage, for me. That “musical” quality that I strive to achieve in such passage is just not there, and never could be with your own approach to writing prose.

And as for removing “unwanted” words, such as “had”; to me, the words were all very much wanted. I do also very much like sentences to be sentences. If such words are dropt, some part of my mind then finds the “sentence” offensive, sloppy, inaccurate, unclear.

Now, of course, all this is very much a matter of taste. Over the years, I have gone through a whole array of styles in my own writing. At one early stage, my prose became so “experimental” that, when I look back on it now, I can see how many readers would have found it unreadable.

One thing I’ve realized since joining this site, and receiving feedback from writer’s with a wide range of tastes, is that when a writer reads someone else’s work, he feels the desire the edit the work so that it conforms to his own personal, current style. If he were to read the same work a few years later, his own current style …would have, hopefully, changed, so that he would “edit” the work differently. Over the years, I have noticed this tendency in myself. When I am reading any writing, including all the classics, I always find one part of my mind editing the text to conform to my own current style, while another part of my mind attempts to put aside all those considerations and simply enjoy the story. Best wishes, Fletch]

“Carlamarie” (3 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I've always enjoyed short stories. I love your pitch, the table of contents and especially like A Substitute Passion. Backed.

Paula L (3 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I like these short stories, the characters are well described and I hated Mandy - poor Helen! Happy to back this.

A.P. Constantin (1 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

You do obsession very well and the dark humour in the Substitute Passion makes a smooth transition from the comical to the absurd (I would not say “tragic”). I would have liked to see Paul rather than just hear about him but it is your story and I cannot argue about it. The dark humour gets even more bizarre in The Price to Pay but it, somehow, works. I could not stop thinking that these stories remind me of Clive Barkers early work. Backed with best wishes.

"karien” (20 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I read A Substitute Passion. As you say, we go from a humorous start to a sobering finale.

Mandy's fateful stiletto heels give release to her unexpressed passion for her boss, so the walrus in red (love her!) becomes the victim of Mandy's hate for Susan, the woman with the sexy shoes, who has taken the object of Mandy's love from her.

You know how to write a short story! Backed.

Maria “mariecapri” (15 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Hi Fletcher. What a great collection. Your stories are short, but so impactive. You manage to engage the reader with the character and then whisk them off into the concept of the story, which is a skill. I particularly liked A Substitute Passion. Backed and best of luck!

Cherry G. (10 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I read the first 3 stories and I'll concentrate on the first, Choosing the Right Drinks.

The story of a dying man in the generally heartless hospice was uplifting.

I think the line that most reveals Clemency's low opinion of herself is her thought that the paunchy builder was so undesirable that he might be interested in her! But she draws away from her own thoughts of despair when Joseph grips her wrist and asks her if he has wasted his life. Clemency starts to listen to the man instead of responding with "Would you like some water?" or "Do you want a blanket." At last she says "What do you mean?"

When she listens she learns other people have regrets too, she's not the only one with the sorrow of her missed chance.. She notices even Sister Mary is obsessed with complaining and finding fault.

I liked the idea that once she started to listen to patients and to really care about them, her own wounds healed; although she couldn't save the dying, she could save herself. I think we could all learn from this because so few of us listen to what others say or even listen to ourselves.. Certainly, nurses have no time and/or desire to listen to patients, but most of us turn away in everyday life too. Turn away ( or hide in the linen cupboard!) or answer with meaningless statements that reject our own or another's pain.. A simple tale at one level but also a deeply philosophical one, .that touches on the eternal question: what is the meaning of our life?

Good descriptive writing with memorable characters and thought provoking themes. I enjoyed the following couple of stories too. The horror of Mandy's rage [in A Substitute Passion], taken out on poor Helen who was trying to act on the advice of her therapist and the next story [Irresistible Temptation] dealing with an awful realisation that a dream is not worth pursuing. I wish you luck with this collection and hope you find a publisher soon.

Tiffini Johnson (10 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I've read the first three stories (Choosing the Right Drinks, A Substitute Passion, Irresistible Temptation), and am fully engaged, amazed and intrigued. Each of the short stories I've read contained real depth, great characters and the intelligent, thought-provoking theme of each hooked me into reading the next chapter. I will definitely be back to complete the reading, as well. You have perfected your writing well. Some of your sentences are long, but grammatically sound… And many of your phrases are very descriptive: for example, in the first story, the line "left him to quietly decay, under the fog of morphine and the same whistling worker" painted a clear image of a dying man in a hospice room, listening to the sounds of life about him. The only thing I might suggest is that sometimes your paragraphs and flow changed abruptly with little transition. For instance, in my favorite chapter, the first, I regretted that Sister Mary "flew in" so abruptly; I wanted to know what his answer was to her question and it sort of took me "out of the story" for a moment to be pulled so abruptly into a different scene. I'm wondering if perhaps there might be a way to add a transition sentence, such as "Sister Mary flew in, yelled at Clemency, who bade her patient a quick farewell" (or something) to help the flow between paragraphs feel easier.

[fk. I’ve looked at these passages again. I suspect that this sort of thing is solely down to personal taste. I like my lack of transition sentences. I trust the reader to be able to follow what’s happening. A short story, or novel, is not a movie, where “establishing” shots are required each time a location changes. Also, I think most writers feel the need to rewrite any story they are reading; this is natural; they are, after all, writers; so this type of suggesting, I think, is just expressing the personal likes and dislikes of the writer’s (Tiffini’s) current style. But if anyone else disagrees, do please contact me]

Honestly, I love books because they are theoretically capable of making me think outside the box, challenge my own thoughts and ideas. That sounds trite, but that's really, truly why I read and why I write (in fact, my logo is "stories that matter"). Unfortunately, there aren't that many thought-provoking novels/books/even short stories that evoke such strong inner reflection as this has. Congrats on a collection of short stories that reminded me of Faulkner's "A Rose for Emily" (a seemingly benign short story about a crazy woman but one which leaves all sorts of social and emotional questions behind). Of course, I've backed it.

Sue “Wilma1” (8 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I think you have done well here you obviously have a talent and have a strong writer’s voice. You layer a story very well and don’t give away too many clues too early. Choosing the wrong drinks – This was a well written philosophical piece with Clemency coming to terms with what was good in her life, not what was bad and missing from it. I liked the fact that she went to the linen room cried then pasted on a smile and got on with it. We can all relate to that. Your next story had some really good lines (A Substitute Passion) her hackles rose; her pulse quickened her breast swelled. Very visual we knew what you meant straight away, a great example of Show not Tell. Writing short stories is sometimes harder than a novel as you have to move the story forward very quickly.

Micheal O'Durcain (8 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Choosing the Right Drinks had, I feel, a happy ending in that Clemency found a purpose that satisfied her.

Helen and Mandy, though surreal, were surprisingly credible in A Substitute Passion.

You write extremely well, the story flows, the characters are not totally strange though they might appear so.

Kristen Stone (27 June, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I always admire people who can write short stories. To say so much in so few words is an art I have not managed to learn. I only read two stories but these were enough to convince me this collection deserves backing. I wish you every success with it.

Melcom (25 June, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Your characterisation is definitely your strong point. Read Choosing the Right Drinks, and A Substitute Passion, and the time flew by which to me proves that I am reading a quality manuscript.

Great read that I'm definitely happy to back your book.

Barry Wenlock (25 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I read A Substitute Passion, and very good it was too.

It is an amusing start ( you didn't need to tell me) and I laughed at her smashing up the old stilettos on her fury.

Then she meets fat Helen and they argue and fight, throwing insults at each other as they do so.

Mandy leaves Helen on the pavement and discovers she has lost a shoe and has to hobble to the shop, her mind full of what has just happened.

We discover about her ex-boyfriend and the new girl, who wears sexy shoes.

Snapping back into true consciousness, she realises she has in fact driven the stiletto into Helen's neck and killed her in her fury.

WOW! Great stuff.

Lynn Clayton (22 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Read Choosing the Right Drinks, and A Substitute Passion. Like all talented writers you understand and portray accurately the opposite sex. These are the sort of stories I would read when not on Authonomy.com. They're funny and moving in a concentrated way, perfect for the form. Brilliant characters. Backed. Lynn

“Gail_M” (11 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

You clearly have a gift for imagery and your flowing, descriptive style makes these stories very easy to read.

I was tempted to comment on the length of some of your sentences but that's for an editor/publisher to decide; although unconventional, I found them quite lyrical and not at all distracting, as one would expect.

I felt that Clemency's tale ended rather abruptly and a little too conveniently, but I'm happy for her nonetheless, and up to now - four stories in - she's my favourite character.

This is a wonderful collection, and I wish you every success with it. Backed with pleasure. Best wishes

Patricia “greeneyes1660” (9 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Fletcher, I read 5 stories of this complex, well written collection. It feels like a Woody Allen work to me, either you get it or you don't, either you love it or you don't. I love things that make me think and push the envelope but they are more difficult to market, so you need to find someone who gets it and will make it shine to it's full potential, because this is a jewel.

Like a Capote or a Warhol you know you are looking and reading genius, yet, it can be misunderstood. I myself had to re-read story 3 a few times, I believe I got it, but I still feel it could be just as good without being so ( for me, only my opinion) abstract.

You are extremely talented and I wish you much success...You will definitely have your own set fan base once your work hits the market.

Titus “Bonar Law” (7 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Fletcher, I have just read five of your short stories [Choosing the Right Drinks, Substitute Passion, Irresistible Temptation, Samuel Pam's Salvation, Daniel and the wine Stain]. Can I stress at the outset that I believe it is harder to write a group of short stories and thread them well, in so keeping the attention span of the reader. Depending on their mood, they might cherry pick as it suits them and never realize the full potential of what is on offer. Stephen King and Somerset M and Du Maurier are my particular favourites in this field. You have written about what I think intrigued you first and I think that is the most important thing. We write because we enjoy doing it and if anyone else likes it...then well and good. Daniel and the Wine Stain stood out most so far. The stories are all off the wall, very digestible and could lead you somewhere.

 

Feedback on the whole collection of stories

Kenneth Edward Lim (24 May, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher, Your stories make me think of Eleanor Rigby and all the forgotten people inhabiting the Beatles song. Your collection of stories focusing on lonely people battling inner demons to find relevance in life strikes a poignant chord in me, realizing that I could simply look around in my daily meanderings and spot one of your characters engaged in the very struggle. You have your finger on the pulse of humanity behind its guise of normalcy. Thank you.

Kevin O'Donnell (21 May, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

Refreshing and different. Little pauses in lives, snapshots of characters and their plans and struggles. I like these, but wonder if they have been compacted a little too much? Do the stories have room to breath enough? Just a thought. Kevin

“dshinton” (28 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hi. I like their frankness with which you speak, your stories are surprisingly short and to the point, which makes me think of Moliner's 'I Love You When I'm Drunk' collection. I often think that I must have a leaky mind so this was just my cup of tea. I definitely agree with the comment below, in that short stories are good for just pottering around with.

Tricia “Bradley Haynes” (24 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

I experienced your stories as buffeting around in dreams, meeting myself and different people, strange and unusual, dipping in and out of waking and sleeping. Different. Best of luck.

Claire Louise (12 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I'm in awe of anyone who can write a short story, I struggle with too much detail! You have some imagination and are clearly a talented writer.Good luck! Starred! Best wishes, Claire

“Bruki's Keeper” (12 January, 2011 posted on Authonomy.com):

These stories are very well written! They kept me interested, and were very easy to understand. The characters were really brought to life, and their minds and emotions were very easy to understand and get drawn into. The stories have great morals and a story line that keeps rolling, but allows the reader to think through everything that is happening. Very good! I hope to see these published! Backing it, and adding stars to it!

Samantha “Twist2010” (22 December, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher, All I could say is wow! I love the depth that the stories go into. I found myself in one way or another relating to the different characters. Great Work!

Athena Lyso (6 December, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

You are gifted with insight into the human psyche and a masterful way of weaving a tale with instantly recognizable characters to touch your reader.

“cicuta” (22 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Dear Fletcher, Sorry its taken me so long, but being an avid reader, (I am in no way a critic), but I was submersed in your collection immediately. Your mind, must be a malevolent force, only eased by fantasy, (just like mine). Its the way you have been able to weave several stories, with each being a great effort. Good luck for the future and take care.

“SaffinaD” (21 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Really enjoyed these. Unique, well written and took me through a range of emotions. A real rollercoaster read.

Clare “livloo” (12 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher, what a curious collection of stories. They are so unique and highly imaginative. Great reading !

N R Callaghan (12 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

This is different, interesting style of writing. I thought some paragraphs were overlong and the level of detail sometimes impedes the pace, but it's a distinctive collection. Backed.

“JPR” (4 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Dear Fletcher you have a wonderful imagination, I wish you every success. Book backed with pleasure. Jan

Jewels Diva (4 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hi Fletcher, I do quite like short stories, you can always fit just one more in before you go to bed. You definitely have an imagination and your stories are quite interesting. I'm backing you.

D K Willis (4 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I admire anyone who can write short stories well. It is an art form that stands on its own and in many ways is far more difficult than writing novels. Your stories are very well done. Impressive in content and style. I am backing your work with pleasure and I wish you great success. Thanks for sharing, Fletcher.

Adrian Belisario (3 October, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Dear Fletcher, After having read a number of your stories, I have to say that you are a writer of great imagination and gifted with the talent and abilities to convey it in a unique voice. Perhaps I should say voices, as your stories demonstrate a wonderful versatility and depth of feeling across a array of situations. One is seldom treated to a writer with such a deep empathy for his fellow man (and woman) and able to draw the reader into their struggles with so little apparent effort. I think you are an author to be read and savoured (and perhaps envied a little, as well). If there's any justice your book will find publication. Keep at it; you're needed.

Bud Carroll (29 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Your stories are well written with an interesting morbid twist to them…. I backed your book and I have also put it on my watchlist so I can read more of your stories. Nice going.

J A Humm (19 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

What delicious ideas for stories. I bet you have to carry a notebook around with you for when these original little gems pop into your mind.

“kaysielynn” (17 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I read several of the stories here and found them quite interesting. You seem to have mastered the short story form!

Stephen Racket (15 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

A collection of well-written, thought provoking stories. Imaginative and skilfully crafted, a delightful mix. Backed with pleasure.

“kwestion” (13 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Entertaining and interesting stories, quite bizarre, like life can sometimes be quite bizarre. Backing it.

“chvolkoff” (12 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I don't know what to say, except that these stories are fabulous. I only read two, but I absolutely loved them! You have a great sensitivity to the feelings of women, (though you like them a little on the slighly "off" side :), and the writing is flawless, captivating, and the stories are poignant with an undercurrent of life, boiling underneath it all. Great job, and backed with pleasure! I'm glad I found your book, your mind is leaking some wonderful stuff!

Simon “SPW” (11 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

A fantastic collection of short stories. Many different styles on offer, and all the more entertaining because of it. Very well written, The dialogues are great and your descriptions vivid. The very best of luck with this and will come back to complete it asap. Backed

Alice “Pen Power” (11 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I have enjoyed reading your stories immensely. You have a great empathetic ability to be able to write about your characters with such understanding. I do wish you luck with your endeavours. all the best Alice

Miles A. Robinson (9 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

What a marvelously eclectic collection of extremely well told tales. Backed

Ron Mitchell (8 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Enjoyed your collection of stories. They are well written and entertaining. The dialogue drama brings the reader into the story very well. Backed.

Chantal “chantellyb” (8 September, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Very introspective and a good exploration of human nature.

PATRICK BARRETT (20 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I still come back to this collection and read another story or re-read the same one as last time. Your writing has a timeless quality and there is always a nuance I missed the first time.

Becca “ipaintwithwords” (19 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I love the blend of Literary fiction with comedy--some of my favorite lit fic novels take on that approach. I only had time to sample some of this, but the writing was good and I think lovers of short stories will enjoy what you have here.

David “Euphemus” (19 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher, Your stories are truly unique. Explorations of the mind and sinister in their findings. Your writing style is quite different in many respects, but I think the work needs more paragraphing which would make it easier to read. I only read three stories, but I am happy to back you.

Suzanne Adams (19 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

The shorts are thought provoking, contemporary and as far as I can tell very well written. Although I am not a fan of the short story, preferring something meatier I am charmed by this collection.

Diane “DMR” (18 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fantastically compelling and so masterfully penned that it is imperative and easy to read these stories - well done!

“DarkTwilight” (18 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletch, You have a writing style that reminds me of Flannery O'Connor. A darker tone, but very lifelike. However, you have something that makes it your own, such as how you carry out the plot, sentence fluency, etc. I'm very impressed with this. Backed. =)

“stoatsnest” (17 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

This is exceptionally brilliant. Maugham-like indeed. Backed.

Clair “chuckylivesinme” (15 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

These are really powerful stories. They are well written, emotional and beautifully scripted. These characters are very real and complicated. but with touches of greatness. I wish you every success with these.

“SingingOwl” (14 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

This is superb. Writing is engaging and punctuation is flawless (how rare indeed is THAT?) and your stories are terrific! I only read a few, but will be back for more. I love short stories, and I know getting them published is a long shot--but this is excellent. Best wishes! BACKED happily.

Justis Call (13 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Wow....these stories are reminiscent of old Twilight Zone tv shows. Twists of fate, as it were. Very creative.

“CamilleS” (13 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Great stories and writing.

Gurmeet Mattu (12 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Firm, confident writing and a fertile imagination at work here. Backed.

Karen “klfullertonl” (12 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

This is well written and you have some compelling stories. This makes a good read.

“flower girl” (11 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I love these stories. They have a depth of meaning and have rich characters. The dialogue too is realistic. I only wish i could write short stories this well !! Backed.

“beeloveks” (11 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

These stories are like photographs, brief moments in time.

Katy “Tari” (11 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

What wealth of genres to choose from. Each story has its own twist. Some are inspiring, others frightening or giving food for reflection. Your style has such energy that spills out in the words and grabs the reader.

I would love to have this book. I'm reading a collection by Deaver at the moment, just finished another by Raymond Carver. i think your work rates highly. Best of luck, Kind regards, Katy,

“Su Dan” (10 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

A good collection of stories. having only read one, l can see you know this genre well. good writing...on my watchlist...

Natalie Bouhmout (10 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

By far one of the best reads that I have read so far on Authonomy.com. I have only read three but I am dying to read the rest. It will be remaining on my book shelf for quite some time. Backed.

Linda Lou (8 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hullo Fletcher. what an interesting variety of topics your stories address. Very good.

“Sue G.” (8 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fascinating ideas! Backed with pleasure.

Gordon Kuhn (7 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Interesting. Surreal. Odd. Good. Frightening. I think all of the above depending on which story you are reading. I enjoyed the several I spent time with as I was hooked and wanted to slowly go through them. Good job. Backed.

“Cly” (7 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I'm delighted to be able to back this book, highly entertaining, well written, thought-provoking. Best Wishes

Baz “Simpko” (5 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I am not a fan of short stories. I always feel like I have invested time in linking myself to something that is then gone so quickly. That said there are a few little gems in here. And (this may sound strange) I felt the less sensational stories made for the better reading. I found the ones that could possibly be called mundane showed the true skill and sensitivity of your writing to its very best. So good work and well done.

Christian Piatt (5 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher: you have a unique voice and perspective here, which presents both a challenge and opportunity. I expect your work may be best received by a speciality publisher who leans toward fresh, quirky humor. Best of luck with this.

Jane “hikey” (4 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

A rich selection of short and original stories that are entertaining and each well crafted. You have a real talent in this genre and the effort that you have put into your writing shines through. I have enjoyed these well structured stories and wish you the best of luck.

“zrinka” (3 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

These are some very interesting stories about ordinary people in some very unordinary situations. Love the way you bring the characters out to life and intertwine them into the plot. It all comes to life on the page and almost jumps out. Nicely done. Backed.

“Geveret” (3 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Achingly spot-on insights into the human condition and the ambivalence of the human condition. Shelved.

“WriterJohnB” (2 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Very nicely written and intriguing stories, from the half dozen I sampled. I'll gladly back it. I find it hard to believe there aren't magazines that would pay for fare such as this. Take care, JohnB

Chuck “Mr. Nom de Plume” (2 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Backed with great pleasure. The work truly fits my definition of literary fiction--difficult to write but when written well (as this work is) a great pleasure to read. Chuck

Heikki Hietala (1 August, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I like your voice, or rather, voices. Subtle nuances in prose, but always a good steady flow. Some explanatory text remains which can easily be edited out, but nothing major to fix. Easy to back.

“robf” (31 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

My only comment is that this reminds me of Raymond Carver, who is one of the all time great short story writers :)

Philip John (31 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hello Fletcher, Short stories are not always easy to write even when the germ of an idea is there. But you have clearly mastered the art from the outset. You write with style. The dialogue, where it comes in, is good. And the stories themselves are captivating. Well done!

Faith “fh” (28 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hi Fletch, This is certainly an intriguing collection of works. Normally I hate short stories but yours are a definite cut above the majority. Your dialogue is full of sparkling wit, anguish and is often very thought provoking. A couple of chapters I read are incredibly deep and sad. The characters totally believable. You have a talent, keep at it. good luck.

“Erika” (28 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I appreciate the craft of the short story and look forward to reading more of your work.

“BoOkLuVeR_15” (26 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I read a few of them, and I thought they were very good. The ones I read were funny, but it was really well written humour, and I enjoyed them.

David Placeres (26 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hi Fletcher, I backed your book with pleasure. It's painstakingly written and dwells on people we likely see everyday but rather ignore because of our own intoxication. Excellent!!!

Abi Knight (23 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Short stories are such a challenge, and yours are so much more than little chunks of fiction. Each one is very distinct, unique and strong in its own right. You use dry humour in an excellent way to balance tone and link this anthology together, but its the depth and richness of the characters that makes these stand out. On my shelf.

Jenny "bluewriter" (22 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I think that you have stories that people will either love or hate. You also have tales that will reveal layers upon layers with further reading. Your work is well done and shows strong talent. Good luck. Backed.

“celticwriter” (15 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Hi Fletcher, backing your book happily. I do appreciate, and enjoy, a good flowing short story. And yours certainly are. Have not read them all...but looking forward to doing so. I'm not a critic, just a mere scriptwriter who is jumping into the novel world for the first time. However, I can appreciate a good visual, and you paint well with words creating fantastic worlds.

much happiness, jim

“Rakhi” (14 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

This is an amazing collection of short stories that inspire and touches the heart. I rarely come across a story that when read several times, each time it offers you a new insight, one that I can easily relate to and learn from. Your writing style is unique and makes the stories more richer and meaningful. I'm happy to have stumbled upon these and will be back to read more.

Joana Graça Moura (13 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I don't know much about short story writing but I know it mustn't be easy. Loved the pitch. Every single one of your stories appealed to me. You've really put a lot of work into your stories and it shows. What really got to me and made me a fan of your book is your ability to draw the characters in just a few lines. Congratulations on a wonderful job. Backed

Marija F.Sullivan (12 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Great characterisation, extraordinary eye for detail. Strong writer's voice. Backed with pleasure and best wishes.

Skip Mahaffey (11 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

What I loved about these stories is that you paint a picture, install the characters and then stand back and let them tell the stories.

The pictures are clear and the characters in just a few sentences are clearly drawn. The dialog is great and the stories are marvellous.

Anxious to read more. Bravo!

Be Brilliant!

John Connor (10 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

It's nice to read a varied and eclectic mix of stories that go somewhere, or say something, rather than just being dropped into a situation with little or no idea of what's happening.

Congratulations on a very nice afternoon's reading.

Backed with pleasure, and I hope you have a success with this.

Robert Davidson (5 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Short story writing has to be the hardest format anyone could chose. How to create 3 dimensional characters in such a limited quantity of words, how to work out a story line which grips, how to leave the reader satisfied?

You've managed all of the requirements. Well done. Definitely backed.

Andrew Foley Jones (5 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I love quirky shorts like these. And the intro to each one is a nice touch. Don t like comparisons but this reminds me of Will Self, the Maestro of this genre. really got me by the short and quirkies this.

Azam Gill (3 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

“Stories from a Leaking Mind.” [the name of my book of short stories on Authonomy.com]

The leak has turned into a welcome outburst threatening to become a flood of lyrical prose, and a starburst of rich characters. Conflict abounds, and runs throughout the stories. The short pitch at the head of each story is an act of kindness to the reader revealing, probably, artistic humility, a fairly uncommon virtue.

Tongue in cheek literary and popular references establish the implied reader-narrator contract. The choice of signifiers in perception and narration harks to a classical style. Yet, since they are known and understood, do not strike an odd note. Their judicious use embellishes the writing and reinstates good taste.

Thank you for a good read.

“missyfleming_22” (1 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

I'm kind of embarrassed you read my book before I read yours. Mine can never even hope to compare to your work! I've only read a few but I'm going to keep reading, which is rare for me I'm sad to say. There are so many emotions that are brought forth by your writing, to be able to bring those out in not just one short story but from all of what I've read is remarkable. Your writing is just awesome, I really don't know how else to put it and I'm being truly genuine. I felt like this wasn't something that should be on this site.

Like I said, I'm going to read on and I'm sure I won't be disappointed. Thanks for sharing this remarkable work with us, it's brilliant. A little something for everyone which is exactly how a collection like this should be!

Missy

“Mike LaRiviere” (1 July, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Fletcher, This is an amazing work that is reflective of the biblical book of Ecclesiastes. The work consists of personal or autobiographic matter, at times expressed in aphorisms and maxims reflecting on the meaning of life and the best things of life. It proclaims all the actions of man to be inherently vain or futile and that the lives of both wise and foolish men end in death. The speaker suggests that one should enjoy the simple pleasures of daily life, such as eating, drinking, and taking enjoyment in one's work, which are gifts from the hand of God.

As I read the chapters [In my story collection: Stories from a Leaking Mind], I did think that your mind was leaking the processes, challenges, fears, frustrations, and questions of life that all of us experience. This was masterfully penned to reflect the deepest thoughts of people at different stages in their personal lives as they relate to the lives of others.

I think that futility at life's end is the saddest of all fears when redemption of soul seems elusive. Often the answers to the greatest needs of one's life lies in the service to others and the giving of ourselves away in the process. This is so expertly depicted in your stories.

All of us, at some time or other experience depression, despondency, hopelessness, or self deprecation. You have used all of these and more in describing your characters and developing them to carry your storylines.

It is one thing to feel down and out, but the ability to portray these emotions on paper is a unique gift that is given to a precious few --obviously you are among those few. You are an excellent wordsmith and a painter of vividly sad, euphoric, frantic, and ecstatic conditions of the spirit. Very well done.

These are among the finest of stories that I have encountered on Authonomy…. I enjoyed this read --maybe enjoyed is the wrong word. One can't really get a warm fuzzy when they get caught up in the life tragedies that you have so distinctly brought to life. But, you get the drift.

I felt as though you took me on a guided tour through the minds of unsuspecting characters, and I got to experience rollercoaster thrills packaged as life's lowest ebbs and disappointments. Betrayal is ugly, failure in life is ugglier, cheerlessness if the ugliest of all.

Backed with pleasure and a recommendation for others to dive into these wonderfully.

Frank “Francesco” (29 June, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

A varied selection but one that does not vary in quality!!! Backed. Good Luck!!!!!
Frank.

Chuck “Mr. Nom de Plume” (28 June, 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Life is fast and short stories fit well into today's lifestyle. These works are among the best [on Authonomy.com], in my opinion. Good luck. Chuck

Paul “Thetinman” (25 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Fletcher, I checked a number of your stories here and found them hugely entertaining. You easily switch from first to second person as I go from one story to the next, and I found no spelling errors, missing quotation marks, etc, which is unusual to say the least. In other words, it was very polished.

You do sometimes 'tell' a bit in the beginning of each story, but it doesn't seem too out of place. I felt myself getting my bearings with your initial comment which is good, but would suggest you watch the passive voice when you do your brief 'tell'.

Other than this very minor nit, I'm really impressed!

Eley “Elires1067” (24 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

What an interesting collection...I enjoyed the stories (well most of them), thought provoking, deranged. The characters can be felt and understood.

Well done.

“Mooderino” (22 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

Really good. The writing is fine, the occasional typo but otherwise very fluid and easy to read. The characters are unusual and well drawn. each has his or her own inner life, I liked them even the unpleasant ones. The dark humour is very well handled. so from a technical point of view I think you have some solid writing here.

Where i think you lift the bar is in the themes and ideas. The observations on life were very original and engaging. I enjoyed the style and voice you used, and it felt genuinely heartfelt without being preachy or forced. Excellent.

Andrew Burans (22 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

I admire authors like you who can write a collection of short stories and move seamlessly from one divergent character to another. Your stories are well constructed and you build your characters superbly. Your descriptive writing style makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Yasmin Esack (20 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com ):

You have the power of the pen and connect extremely well with the reader. Your opening lines are catchy and the characters are realistic and attractive. Happy to support this.

Denise (18 June 2010 posted on Authonomy.com):

Fletcher hello, well your title just jumped out, grabbed me by the throat (well I should say mind) and would not let go. What a wonderful title and the ‘wonderful’ is a bit weak really. You are obviously a seasoned writer looking at your pitch, and the body of your book is easy well paced and just love short stories, though I would think they are harder to produce. You manage to captivate early and keep me and I have not finished the book yet but will continue. ..BACKED for sure...Choosing the right drinks just stayed in my mind and that is the best compliment I can give at this time.