Editing further: Andrea Segovia Loses Control

It had been two years and six months since I finished the previous draft of this story. I've edited it again and managed to reduce it by 1,271 words (with no loss of content). The files below show all the edits:

 

The second draft (the passages added since draft one are marked)

A file showing all the edits between draft two and three

The final draft (draft three)

 

As a point of interest, I've also included here two files showing the two stages of editing that I did this time round:

The edits between draft two and draft two-a

The edits between draft two-a and draft three

 

26 November 2010